Agree with TarileFreak
Most of Newgrounds is 14-17 year old kids, so you can't go by them when they say "this was hilarious!! so funny". Your animation was good, but TarileFreak hit the nail on the head with a lot of things that could use some work. There were a lot of poorly written jokes, that while you may say fits the goofy style of humor you were going for, they come across more as lazy, with no real sense of purpose. (red suit joke). The trick to writing a good comedy is sitting down and writing out a script or screen play before animating. This way, even if the animation is bad, the writing and story is still solid. Fortunately, you did have pretty good animtion. Voice acting could use a lot of work (next time go on a forum and ask for multiple people to do voices for multiple characters. "hey guys, i need a really good black-guy voice for a character I'm writing up in a new animation I'm working on!").
All in all, not bad, but could use work. Keep at it though!!!
What's with ragging on the Star Trek reference? I think a brief red-shirt mention is perfectly acceptable in a sci-fi short. I rewrote this thing multiple times as always, I think I varied my voice quite well for the ones I did, and the "black-guy voice" WAS done by someone else who's quite a talented and Newgrounds-renowned voice actor. If you didn't find the short funny, that's perfectly fine. Everyone's tastes are different, and I'm honestly pleasantly surprised so many people do enjoy it. But every part of the story was exactly as it was meant to be and was worked on vigorously, and I'd appreciate it if it was not chalked up to laziness because your preferences differ from my style.
Hilarious. Enough said
Haha very nice
You're lucky college kids still visit this site, it's a shame most of the reviewers don't get it. Hilarious nonetheless, awesome impersonation haha
Don't have too much to say about this one.
Unfortunately going to have to go with the guy below me.
As someone else had pointed out, it was extremely impressive how seemingly complex all the traps were, and how well they were put together, despite having no historical basis. I loved absolutely everything about this. Brilliant animation, vibrant colors, excellent music choice, creative story, fun, charming... I can go on and on. Plain and simple, probably the best animation on Newgrounds to date.
Possibly the worst thing I've ever seen on here.
Despite having excellent animation, I thought everything about this was horridly horrible. Extremely annoying voices, terrible concept, draggy, stupid, and the biggest downer: not funny in the least. I try and stray from writing reviews like this, but when I see a new flash created by two excellent and well known authors like yourselves and am just completely appalled by your work, I have to review.
I actually closed out early, probably just before the ending, after the fourth act, it was that bad. Please don't make things like this in the future, the only thing that is making the score high is the animation.
Such good animation and story powered by such weak, WEAK voice acting. I don't get it. You think after years of doing this series you'd have just gotten the hang of being good voice actors. Sorry to be so blunt, it's just sad to see something so good go to waste. Not to say I didn't enjoy this, it was well made, interesting story. But definitely not funny, and the main reason for that is the weak voice acting for the jokes.
Not for me...
Despite the well drawn and smooth animation that most of these points are for, I really despised most of this. Rape jokes? Are we in middle school?
With rubbish voice acting (especially on the girl's part) and mediocre dialogue and script writing, there was hardly anything about this flash that stood out. Repetitive camera angles with a lack in scenery change made it even more tedious to watch. Very unoriginal jokes and atmospherically unfriendly, in my opinion. I didn't enjoy this very much, but I don't doubt that you could cretate something very good one day, if not already.
I deeply respect Egoraptors voice acting talents. Especially here on NG it's hard to come by some quality voice acting. This short in particular was just really funny and had some good jokes. I liked the frame of his ass up against the wall. Everything about this was smooth and had a great vibe about it. Awesome awesome job
I absoloutely loved this.
I've never heard this song before, and with that being the case, this flash definitely sparked for me. I love how smooth everything transitioned, and how well you made basically every part of the animation line up and synchronize with the lyrics of the song. This was very well made and I'm quite impressed. My suggestion to you, since it's so good, is since the Flash only takes up 3mb, increase the sound quality. In Flash, go to Publish Settings and click on the Flash tab. Depending on if the song throughout the flash is set to Stream or Event, click on the one in the tab that relates to that one. Make sure you uncheck 'Convert stereo to mono' and select something like 64KBPS and Best. Then just replace the file on Newgrounds. Seriously, it'll bump the score up on this thing a lot, and I'll watch it again in much more enjoyment. Great job on this!
Im glad you liked the song and animation!
suggestion wise I'll see if it'll improve it, ya see when I increased the quality to 32 kbps there a small amount of desync! I'd like to think sync is a little more important that sound quality but i'll give it a shot.
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